5.2 Sentence Faults (Obj. 3)

Your Task. In the following, identify the sentence fault (fragment, run-on, comma splice). Then revise to remedy the fault.

Although they began as a side business for Disney. Destination weddings now represent a major income source.
About 2,000 weddings are held yearly. Which is twice the number just ten years ago.
Weddings may take place in less than one hour, however the complete cost may be as much as $20,000.
Limousines line up outside Disney’s wedding pavilion, ceremonies are scheduled in two-hour intervals.
Many couples prefer a traditional wedding others request a fantasy experience.

5.4 Your Task. Business writing is more forceful when it uses active-voice verbs. Revise the following sentences so that verbs are in the active voice. Put the emphasis on the doer of the action. Add subjects if necessary.

Example    Antivirus software was installed on her computer.
Revision    Madison installed antivirus software on her computer.
To protect students, laws were passed in many states that prohibited the use of social security numbers as identification.
Software was installed to track how much time employees spend surfing the Web.
Checks are processed more quickly by banks because of new regulations.
Millions of packages are scanned by FedEx every night as packages stream through its Memphis hub.
Companies are being advised by analysts that tablet computers have to be replaced more often than PCs.

5.5 Passive Voice (Obj. 4)

Your Task. When indirectness or tact is required, use passive-voice verbs. Revise the following sentences so that they are in the passive voice.

Example    Travis did not submit the proposal before the deadline.
Revision    The proposal was not submitted before the deadline.
Accounting seems to have made a serious error in this report.
We cannot ship your order for smart surge protectors until May 5.
The government first issued a warning regarding the use of this pesticide more than 15 months ago.
Your insurance policy does not automatically cover damage to rental cars.
We cannot provide patient care unless patients show proof of insurance.

5.7 Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers (Obj. 4)

Your Task. Revise the following sentences to avoid dangling and misplaced modifiers.

When collecting information before purchasing a tablet, the Web proved to be my best resource.
To win the lottery, a ticket must be purchased.
Angered by slow computer service, complaints were called in by hundreds of unhappy users.
The exciting Cosmopolitan is just one of the fabulous hotels you see strolling along the Las Vegas strip.
Walking into the hotel lobby, the artwork was stunning.