Topic: Composition €“ Sentence Structure Exercise

Page 8 and page 10 of attachement, highlighted in yellow. For EACH (3) sentence, explain in a short paragraph what you think is wrong with the original use of pattern(s) and how the pattern(s) should be changed. Then rewrite the sentence to use the pattern(s) more effectively.
For this exercise, imagine you are facing the following workplace assignment:
You are preparing to recommend that top management install a new heating system that uses the cogeneration process. You have information on the following topics: 12 bullet points
Not all the information in this list is relevant, but how do you decide what is relevant and what is not? Put differently, what is the scope of your proposal?